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on: 12:54:33 AM 08/05/13
"Are we there yet?"

"No."

"Uuhhnnn!! How much longeeerrrr?"

"We'll get there when we get there."

"Fiiine... Is it nice there? Pretty?"

"Yeah, it's nice. There's a big pond. I know you'll enjoy that."

*gasp* "Wait, I won't know anyone there!"

"I'm sure you'll do fine."

"My tie is itchy."

*kick*

*kick kick*

"Stop kicking."

"I'm BORED."

"Let's play the Quiet Game. We'll see who can be quiet the longest."

"Are where there NOW?"

"NO! WE ARE NOT THERE. I WILL TELL YOU WHEN WE'RE THERE, DAVID."

"Don't yell at me!"

"I'm sorry, but you have to settle down. I know it's a long ride, and you've been good most of the way, but I'm a little tense and I'd like for the rest of the drive to go smoothly. Okay?"

*sigh* "Okay."

*kick*

"DON'T MAKE ME COME BACK THERE!!"

"Can I wave at the cars behind us?"

"No."

"Why not?"

"Just keep still. Don't fidget. Don't fuss. Be quiet."

"Pfff..."

*sigh*

*sniffle*

*huff*

"Are we there yet?"

"I SWEAR TO GOD, DAVID! I WILL TURN THIS HEARSE RIGHT AROUND!!"
If I should live until I wake, I pray the web my death to fake.



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on: 05:19:16 AM 08/15/13
AHHHH hahaha!  That was a genius twist.  Short, sweet, and funny/creepy.  Damn impatient corpse.
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on: 11:35:42 PM 10/19/15
This was so great!   You might have meant for it to be creepy, but it made me laugh so hard I had to sign up.  My friend and I had a character like this in one of our interactive stories.  He was the city corninor because he could hear the dead talk till they passed on.  We even had it set up that he got into an arguement this way w/ his brother who had been murdered.  Later they found out he was just a ghost.   "I thought you moved on.   I didn't move on, I just couldn't get a word in edgewise, motermouth".  Great story.   



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on: 08:39:02 PM 12/11/15
This is perfect!