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Slimebeast's Projects => Slimy Stories => Topic started by: Slimebeast on 02:35:57 AM 01/11/13

Title: A Few Suggestions
Post by: Slimebeast on 02:35:57 AM 01/11/13
Suggestion: We could use another person at check-in during peak hours.

Suggestion: Please move the hot dog cart away from the main water slide. Also please have water slide staff keep an eye out for children who just ate. When anyone gets sick in there, three or four people have to go through it before we know about it.

Suggestion: It would be nice if we had a way to give more detailed information anonymously. Maybe private meeting time with management?

Suggestion: Need more security at south gate.

Suggestion: Music in the reptile house keeps slowing down or reversing, it's VERY annoying.

Suggestion: Please tell the mascots not to try eating in their costumes. We keep getting one in with food all over its face and we think someone's trying to be funny. The mouth opening is mesh, so eating isn't even possible.

Suggestion: Please fix the music in the reptile house, it's still driving me up the wall.

Suggestion: Guests are complaining about the amount of towels in their rooms.

Suggestion: Need a better or newer coffee machine for the break room.

Suggestion: I wasn't going to say anything becuase I'm pretty tolerant, but please stop admitting children without faces. They won't stay in the guest areas.

Suggestion: The common area could use a bigger selection of DVDs and games. The collection is already getting stale.

Suggestion: Still need security at south gate. What's cheaper, having a staffer pass by once in a while, or painting over all the vandalism?

Suggestion: South gate needs more security.

Suggestion: What are we doing about the profanities at the employee exit? Send security there more times of the day, or whatever.

Suggestion: Don't feel safe leaving south gate at end of shift.

Suggestion: Frank is cheating at solitare when he thinks I'm not watching. Please do something about this immediately.

Suggestion: Tell the mascots to stay out of where they don't belong. One of them keeps turning off music in the reptile house. Can't tell who because of the suit. Have a meeting or something.

Suggestion: Please give the Mascots more break time or allow them to take short breathers during work hours. Sweat and body odor are one thing, but now we keep getting the same suit full of vomit.

Suggestion: Stop Frank, he's a menace. It has now spread to Sudoku. I am not making this up.

Suggestion: Sorry to write on a napkin, but we need more suggestion cards or else somebody is stealing them all.

Suggestion: Stop the fucking music.

Suggestion: I swear, all these blank kids are getting into everything. Every time I kill one of them the others just misbehave more. I keep finding them in piles at the bottom of stairways and they think its funny. It's not funny. I can't get through.

Suggestion: We need more suggestion cards.

Suggestion: We recieved a mascot suit with paint on its gloves. Someone took it to the south gate, and the color matches what the vandal is using. Might be worth looking into. Also, where are the cards?

Suggestion: costume sticking to the sores

Suggestion: It'
s tOo hard
to writ with
this gloves on

Suggestion: Thanks for the suggestion cards! Finally! What are we doing about staffing check-in at peak hours?

Suggestion: Once more, sorry for the napkin. We're out of cards again.

Suggestion: One of the mascots cornered me in the supply closet and grabbed my breasts. I've told Michael Sheehan about it but I don't think he's going to do anything because I don't know who was in the outfit. I'm going to file a lawsuit if management continues to avoid my calls. This is a final notice. Additionally, please restock the cards. I suspect they were removed so you could discourage my reports.

Suggestion: ha ha I'm a mouse

Suggestion: FUCK YOU.

Suggestion: Someone's taking out light bulbs. I mean, just everywhere. The guests are getting increasingly angry about flipping switches only to have nothing happen.

Suggestion: When are we getting some new DVDs in the common room? I'm not complaining because they're old movies, just that plenty are scratched and don't play all the way through.

Suggestion: What's the ETA on that coffee maker?

Suggestion: The vending machines on the third floor in the guest area are constantly unplugged and the money slots are often jammed with suggestion cards. I don't even know what these cards are talking about.

Suggestion: We need more cards again.

Suggestion: Try to find Frank.

Suggestion: I will give you clues about Frank, okay?

Suggestion: Clue #1, It's cold.

Suggestion: Clue #2, It's wet.

Suggestion: We need another coat of paint on the south gate. Are you doing anything about this clown?

Suggestion: Clue #3, Flush.

Suggestion: The hot dog cart is still next to the water slide and there have been two more incidents involving children getting sick halfway through the pipe. This is really reflecting poorly on the resort.

Suggestion: I don't think youre lookng for frank!!

Suggestion: Hey, I don't want to be dick, but seriously, where are the cards? This box is pointless.

Suggestion: I keep sinking into the floor or

Suggestion: maybe it's just that I feel like it.

Suggestion: I can't get any rest because there's too much to do. Every time I lie down guests keep asking if I'm okay.

Suggestion: i can't get my head off i can't get my head off i cant get my head off i cant get my hed off i can't get my head of

Suggestion: ignore last card it was my real head i forgot

Suggestion: the costume is sticking to my sores and there are more sores

Suggestion: all i am is sores

Suggestion: the costume is breathing and if i dont match its movements i can't get any air

Suggestion: F

Suggestion: UCK

Suggestion: i keep locking the gates but someone keeps opening them again please tell them to stop doing that because it lets everyone out again and i feel that's counter productive

Suggestion: they found frank and they're going to blame me please advise

Suggestion: HAHAHAHA franks face was like a bad looking plate of mashed potatoes when they pulled him out but when i laughed at it everyone looked at me even the people with faces which is odd

Suggestion: i have to think of what to do

Suggestion: oh

Suggestion: i know hang on

Suggestion: I'm not sure if the suggestion box is the right place for this, but security isn't doing much about my complaint. Over the last couple days I've been circling the resort and counting the number of staffers. As far as I can tell, there are more mascots on the grounds than we have on payroll. Security says it doesn't make sense, but I think we have one extra.

Suggestion: please help, costumes are heavy with people inside and there's no hook left for me
Title: Re: A Few Suggestions
Post by: TDKMC1 on 10:23:51 PM 01/18/13
Is this one a sequel/ clarify of "Abandoned by Disney?"
Subtly creepy. I like it. Not an "AAAAAHH!" kind of story, more of a "wait...what?"
*EDIT* I looked at the "Abandoned by Disney" thread. Welp, that answers my question.
Title: Re: A Few Suggestions
Post by: Slimebeast on 03:05:32 AM 01/19/13
Title: Re: A Few Suggestions
Post by: TDKMC1 on 08:27:32 PM 01/23/13
Think Vahn would put this into the short? Or at least mention it?
Title: Re: A Few Suggestions
Post by: Slimebeast on 12:38:14 AM 01/24/13
You never know. :) Maybe a suggestion box in the background... stuffed with cards. Heh.
Title: Re: A Few Suggestions
Post by: dnewbold on 01:46:07 AM 03/16/13
awesome addition.

could be good for "credits rolling" type thing for the film.
Title: Re: A Few Suggestions
Post by: Felix Theo Wren on 01:52:52 AM 05/21/13
Suggestion: ignore last card it was my real head i forgot

For some reason, that made me cackle out loud. XD

Anyway, I love the subtlety and indirectness of this.  There really ought to be more pastas written in such an amorphous manner - it makes it so much more disturbing.  You have a gift for putting the reader right into the setting and showing them the events and imagery of the story, as if they really were experiencing it all first-hand without any explanations being outlined for them. 

Also, talk about never breaking character.. ever..

Title: Re: A Few Suggestions
Post by: Slimebeast on 02:22:35 AM 05/21/13
I live for cackles!
Title: Re: A Few Suggestions
Post by: goolygoo on 12:07:41 AM 05/22/13
While not offering all the answers to the mystery behind what happened to Mowgli's Palace (a good thing, mind), it does add extra speculation to certain things. Like, the negative-colored Mickey Mouse was in fact a real person, whose bizarre sores began to attach him to the costume and  drive him insane. His body degraded to the point where in a final act of suicidal madness managed to be able to pull of his own head off his fragile, sore-eaten body, the yellow chunks being all the bile and infectious pus building up in his system the whole time. At least, that's my speculation anyway.  :)
Title: Re: A Few Suggestions
Post by: Slimebeast on 01:36:36 AM 05/22/13
The coffee maker did it.

Title: Re: A Few Suggestions
Post by: Felix Theo Wren on 06:21:35 PM 06/06/13
Also: blank kids shuffling about everywhere = Aphex-Twin-style images running through my head. COME TO DADDY.
Title: Re: A Few Suggestions
Post by: CosmicSpartan on 10:05:35 AM 02/04/15

I LOVE THIS! I like how it builds up suspense and mystery. This is a great pasta. :)
Title: Re: A Few Suggestions
Post by: Silent_Mayan on 02:58:58 PM 04/15/15
Maybe you could actually do a story on this. Like from the point of the guy in the Mickey suit or from a collaborative point of view from all staff members. It'd certainly be creepy, and maybe put this more in perspective.
Title: Re: A Few Suggestions
Post by: NegaMouse on 12:30:09 PM 06/08/16
Do you mind if I adapt this for YouTube?
Title: Re: A Few Suggestions
Post by: Slimebeast on 08:01:20 PM 06/08/16
Go for it. The only restriction on any of my work is that it has to be kept free for people. (No selling, no ads, etc.) Otherwise, the sky's the limit!
Title: Re: A Few Suggestions
Post by: First World on 06:46:01 AM 06/09/16
Excellently executed Creepypasta.
Full of your inimitable dark humor.
Title: Re: A Few Suggestions
Post by: BlackIndigo on 11:28:41 AM 01/21/17
You should put this into a story it is great!
Title: Re: A Few Suggestions
Post by: audrei9 on 08:42:47 PM 11/03/17
Uhhhh, you mind if I try and write my own? Like, from the perspective of the person who recovered that suggestion box?
Title: Re: A Few Suggestions
Post by: imaslug on 04:39:51 PM 12/11/17
I'm actually a little confused by some of the stuff .
"Are my feet sinking into the floor"
"or is it just me?"
Is this Frank speaking? And
"Please help the costume is heavy and there are no hooks left for me"
I don't get it. Like, "I don't get it so I don't know the intended scare" confused.
But other than that this is a pretty creepy story.